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Riona ([personal profile] rionaleonhart) wrote2024-09-30 10:38 am

We're Clearly Too Cute To Be A Terrorist.

I'm enjoying looking through everyone's responses to the 'mistakes you noticed after posting fanfiction' poll! Please continue to share your shame so I can feel less alone.

I've just realised I should really have included a 'forgetting crucial worldbuilding details' option. I fell prey to this twice recently, when writing for In Stars and Time!

My first mistake: I needed to name a location in Vaugarde. Vaugarde is fantasy France, so I wanted something that sounded appropriately French. In the NaNo I wrote when I was sixteen, there was a location called the Endless Plains, so I named the place in the fic the Toujours Plains as a little nod to that; 'toujours' means 'always' or 'forever'.

A week later, I suddenly remembered that Vaugarde worships the concept of change. The idea of endlessness, of changelessness, of remaining the same: that's anathema. Why would a society like that name a place after the concept of forever? Does everyone in Vaugarde just really hate these goddamn plains?

My second mistake: I described the sky as 'a brilliant, vibrant mid-afternoon blue'. This is fine! Until you remember that In Stars and Time is set in a world where nobody can see colour. A reader pointed this one out, and I was mortified.


Tem and I are nearing the end of our Master Detective Archives: Rain Code replay. Here are some more notes from our adventures with this silly game.

Shinigami: I don't smell any corpses. I thought there'd be some around here.
Yuma: Of course not!
Tem: Of corpse not.

One of Yuma's voice clips is just 'what do??' and it's extremely funny.

Having taken a wrong turn, I was cornered by Guillaume and the Peacekeepers. 'Let's dunk his head in the river and suck the water out through his ass,' Guillaume proposed: a colourful threat that I am recording mainly so I won't be the only one haunted by the mental image.

When Yuma is arrested and panicking:

Yuma: Shinigami, what do I do?
Shinigami: I must admit, seeing you so pitiful is nice. I'm gonna stare at you for a while.
Riona: Shinigami truly speaks for us all.

In Danganronpa, if you max out your relationship with a character, you receive that character's underpants. A part of me is now conditioned to expect underpants whenever I bond with characters in other games.

Shinigami: Master, you and Yakou have formed the ultimate bond together.
Riona: Well, where are his fucking underpants, then?

The rest of my notes are spoilery, so I'll share those once we've finished this replay!
apiphile: fuck you and fuck your fucking face (sire & dam)

[personal profile] apiphile 2024-10-08 01:22 am (UTC)(link)
Do you want a woman to follow you around and constantly insult you? Do you want her to drag you around by a chain attached to your neck? Do you want her to be so much taller than you that your face ends up pretty much against her tits when she dances with you? Do you want her to guide your hand down her throat? Do you want her to grow to enormous size and engulf you in her mouth

It's possible a lot of people might discover that's what they want after playing it?