I remember reading/writing author’s notes that matched yours in tone and content to the T. It’s almost eerie what a young hive-mind can do in fandom. Hm. But, I’ll say this at least, your fic is far more competently written than anything I had at that age. My grasp on grammar is pretty tenuous at the best of times even now (which I’m sure you’ve never noticed). That’s pretty impressive.
I reeled backwards, feeling the power of the vision like a physical force
Woah. That was… unexpected.
I hit the ground and blackened out.
Rachel done hit the ground charred again.
{No... no more... let me sleep... nothing... let me see nothing...}
Please, please tell me you were listening to My Immortal while writing this.
God knows what Tonshieka's secret is
But I must know!!!
I'll be honest: having a knife that can cut into other worlds is pretty cool in itself. Do you really need to steal Pokémon when you have a magical knife?
Valid. Also, of you have an amazing knife that can cut into other worlds, why are you hung up on rookie ass Pokémon and their tween trainers?
Ignoring the fact that my pillow was wet with tears, I leapt out of bed and ran out into the open, the moonlight.
This chapter is far more poetic and dramatic than everything that came previous. I’m really feeling the amped up tragedy.
"You will have many visions of me. You may be able to find out Team Rocket's plans, if you are watching me at the wrong time. And we wouldn't want that, would we? So I will just have to dispose of you."
We’ve totally jumped genres and plotlines and things are so off the rails and I am having a blast.
An Arcanine is WAAAAAAAAAAAAAY faster than a twelve-year-old girl.
Unexpected.
A MASSIVE blast of water came flying towards it, laced with electricity, a blast of fire shooting alongside it.
Like a combo attack from the early running of Sailor Moon.
You might reasonably have expected this to be a significant detail of the plot! BUT NO.
Maybe this was the weird one-off test for audiences to see if we’d want a spin-off series of Team Rocket Knife Guy. A preliminary pilot. He might be the Xena to Rachel’s Hercules.
Great Project.
Ominous.
This one will create massive amounts of energy.
Oh God, it is a Sailor Moon plot.
We can do it just before I explain the plan, if you like.
Laughing, forever.
You'd sort of expect him to have severed the mental link as soon as he discovered how
Right? Maybe he’s just a troll. Or pulling a Starscream and hoping to use Rachel to take down Giovanni, so he can fill the power vaccum left behind. Hmm.
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I remember reading/writing author’s notes that matched yours in tone and content to the T. It’s almost eerie what a young hive-mind can do in fandom. Hm. But, I’ll say this at least, your fic is far more competently written than anything I had at that age. My grasp on grammar is pretty tenuous at the best of times even now (which I’m sure you’ve never noticed). That’s pretty impressive.
I reeled backwards, feeling the power of the vision like a physical force
Woah. That was… unexpected.
I hit the ground and blackened out.
Rachel done hit the ground charred again.
{No... no more... let me sleep... nothing... let me see nothing...}
Please, please tell me you were listening to My Immortal while writing this.
God knows what Tonshieka's secret is
But I must know!!!
I'll be honest: having a knife that can cut into other worlds is pretty cool in itself. Do you really need to steal Pokémon when you have a magical knife?
Valid. Also, of you have an amazing knife that can cut into other worlds, why are you hung up on rookie ass Pokémon and their tween trainers?
Ignoring the fact that my pillow was wet with tears, I leapt out of bed and ran out into the open, the moonlight.
This chapter is far more poetic and dramatic than everything that came previous. I’m really feeling the amped up tragedy.
"You will have many visions of me. You may be able to find out Team Rocket's plans, if you are watching me at the wrong time. And we wouldn't want that, would we? So I will just have to dispose of you."
We’ve totally jumped genres and plotlines and things are so off the rails and I am having a blast.
An Arcanine is WAAAAAAAAAAAAAY faster than a twelve-year-old girl.
Unexpected.
A MASSIVE blast of water came flying towards it, laced with electricity, a blast of fire shooting alongside it.
Like a combo attack from the early running of Sailor Moon.
You might reasonably have expected this to be a significant detail of the plot! BUT NO.
Maybe this was the weird one-off test for audiences to see if we’d want a spin-off series of Team Rocket Knife Guy. A preliminary pilot. He might be the Xena to Rachel’s Hercules.
Great Project.
Ominous.
This one will create massive amounts of energy.
Oh God, it is a Sailor Moon plot.
We can do it just before I explain the plan, if you like.
Laughing, forever.
You'd sort of expect him to have severed the mental link as soon as he discovered how
Right? Maybe he’s just a troll. Or pulling a Starscream and hoping to use Rachel to take down Giovanni, so he can fill the power vaccum left behind. Hmm.