...and I clearly do not know what I am talking about, because I have just re-read it and realised that 'the former understudy' has a really lovely rhythm to it. I think there's just something slightly odd about having 'the scotsman', 'the former understudy' and 'the other' all in the same sentence.
Er, the lesson here is 'never ask an editor to comment on your fanfiction'.
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Er, the lesson here is 'never ask an editor to comment on your fanfiction'.