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rionaleonhart) wrote2024-09-30 10:38 am
rionaleonhart) wrote2024-09-30 10:38 am
We're Clearly Too Cute To Be A Terrorist.
I'm enjoying looking through everyone's responses to the 'mistakes you noticed after posting fanfiction' poll! Please continue to share your shame so I can feel less alone.
I've just realised I should really have included a 'forgetting crucial worldbuilding details' option. I fell prey to this twice recently, when writing for In Stars and Time!
My first mistake: I needed to name a location in Vaugarde. Vaugarde is fantasy France, so I wanted something that sounded appropriately French. In the NaNo I wrote when I was sixteen, there was a location called the Endless Plains, so I named the place in the fic the Toujours Plains as a little nod to that; 'toujours' means 'always' or 'forever'.
A week later, I suddenly remembered that Vaugarde worships the concept of change. The idea of endlessness, of changelessness, of remaining the same: that's anathema. Why would a society like that name a place after the concept of forever? Does everyone in Vaugarde just really hate these goddamn plains?
My second mistake: I described the sky as 'a brilliant, vibrant mid-afternoon blue'. This is fine! Until you remember that In Stars and Time is set in a world where nobody can see colour. A reader pointed this one out, and I was mortified.
Tem and I are nearing the end of our Master Detective Archives: Rain Code replay. Here are some more notes from our adventures with this silly game.
Shinigami: I don't smell any corpses. I thought there'd be some around here.
Yuma: Of course not!
Tem: Of corpse not.
One of Yuma's voice clips is just 'what do??' and it's extremely funny.
Having taken a wrong turn, I was cornered by Guillaume and the Peacekeepers. 'Let's dunk his head in the river and suck the water out through his ass,' Guillaume proposed: a colourful threat that I am recording mainly so I won't be the only one haunted by the mental image.
When Yuma is arrested and panicking:
Yuma: Shinigami, what do I do?
Shinigami: I must admit, seeing you so pitiful is nice. I'm gonna stare at you for a while.
Riona: Shinigami truly speaks for us all.
In Danganronpa, if you max out your relationship with a character, you receive that character's underpants. A part of me is now conditioned to expect underpants whenever I bond with characters in other games.
Shinigami: Master, you and Yakou have formed the ultimate bond together.
Riona: Well, where are his fucking underpants, then?
The rest of my notes are spoilery, so I'll share those once we've finished this replay!
I've just realised I should really have included a 'forgetting crucial worldbuilding details' option. I fell prey to this twice recently, when writing for In Stars and Time!
My first mistake: I needed to name a location in Vaugarde. Vaugarde is fantasy France, so I wanted something that sounded appropriately French. In the NaNo I wrote when I was sixteen, there was a location called the Endless Plains, so I named the place in the fic the Toujours Plains as a little nod to that; 'toujours' means 'always' or 'forever'.
A week later, I suddenly remembered that Vaugarde worships the concept of change. The idea of endlessness, of changelessness, of remaining the same: that's anathema. Why would a society like that name a place after the concept of forever? Does everyone in Vaugarde just really hate these goddamn plains?
My second mistake: I described the sky as 'a brilliant, vibrant mid-afternoon blue'. This is fine! Until you remember that In Stars and Time is set in a world where nobody can see colour. A reader pointed this one out, and I was mortified.
Tem and I are nearing the end of our Master Detective Archives: Rain Code replay. Here are some more notes from our adventures with this silly game.
Shinigami: I don't smell any corpses. I thought there'd be some around here.
Yuma: Of course not!
Tem: Of corpse not.
One of Yuma's voice clips is just 'what do??' and it's extremely funny.
Having taken a wrong turn, I was cornered by Guillaume and the Peacekeepers. 'Let's dunk his head in the river and suck the water out through his ass,' Guillaume proposed: a colourful threat that I am recording mainly so I won't be the only one haunted by the mental image.
When Yuma is arrested and panicking:
Yuma: Shinigami, what do I do?
Shinigami: I must admit, seeing you so pitiful is nice. I'm gonna stare at you for a while.
Riona: Shinigami truly speaks for us all.
In Danganronpa, if you max out your relationship with a character, you receive that character's underpants. A part of me is now conditioned to expect underpants whenever I bond with characters in other games.
Shinigami: Master, you and Yakou have formed the ultimate bond together.
Riona: Well, where are his fucking underpants, then?
The rest of my notes are spoilery, so I'll share those once we've finished this replay!
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...yeah, wow. That's...the words "violent", "horny" and "gross" all spring to mind.
"If we're so close, where's your underpants!"
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I'd have bluffed and been like sorry my brain autocorrected from the word I meant which was "HUE". But I've done massive world-building/canon inaccuracy things as well because I just fucking. Forgot.
I was cornered by Guillaume and the Peacekeepers. 'Let's dunk his head in the river and suck the water out through his ass,' Guillaume proposed: a colourful threat that I am recording mainly so I won't be the only one haunted by the mental image.
Someone's going to get a kink from this
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Rain Code is very much the game you get when someone has a whole load of kinks and a budget. Do you want a woman to follow you around and constantly insult you? Do you want her to drag you around by a chain attached to your neck? Do you want her to be so much taller than you that your face ends up pretty much against her tits when she dances with you? Do you want her to guide your hand down her throat? Do you want her to grow to enormous size and engulf you in her mouth? If so, this is the game for you.
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It's possible a lot of people might discover that's what they want after playing it?
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Let's... not.
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So, I started writing my epic RDR2 fic after having watched Let's Plays, but before having played the game. As such, my understanding of a bunch of canon stuff was... incomplete, let's say.
Some highlights of various drafts include:
• Conspicuous reference to plants in areas where they decidedly do not grow (these, I just left in and lampshaded a little)
• Describing the map location of a plot-important but invented-for-the-fic ranch and realizing later that it was directly on top of very different plot-relevant canon ranch (left it; no one's called me on it)
• Mentally transposing a city into a completely different state and having an aside about a local industry which probably could not have existed in the climate the chapter took place in (caught it; changed it)
• Writing a scene with a character visiting a grave which had an established in-game location nowhere near the location the chapter took place in (caught it; deleted it)
• Giving Arthur pronounced and remarked-upon preferences for horses entirely unlike the in-game S-tier prestige horse that a lot of players probably ended up with (left it in; people can just deal with my fanon reality)
And, not in the big epic fic, but in another RDR2 fic drafted before playing, the one I'm most... proud? ...of:
• Having one character drunkenly protest that he doesn't stoop to using poison when he does, in fact, give you a sidequest in-game where he teaches you how to make poison.
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I love all of these, but the last one in particular is incredible.
If it's any consolation, I once wrote a Horizon Zero Dawn fic that centred on Nil giving Aloy a necklace made from the teeth of the bandits she's killed. Not long afterwards, I watched a compilation of Nil's dialogue... in which he mentions that he doesn't approve of taking trophies from kills. WHOOPS.